Cronenberg is the shiznit.
Dave can UNFOLD a story. Slowly, slowly. But not too slow.
No unnecessary parts. The tension is AWESOME. THIS is how you tell a story.
I don’t recall seeing a PUSH. We care about the characters. The little girl is a bit of a throw-away–cliche. But we care about the son. The wife: she’s so real: gritty, tough, fragile. The son crosses over a line. The son changes too much; he loves his family and is happy, then he hates his dad and is violent.
Most of their lines are real, and delivered real. ie: wife: I’mmmm OK.
Cronenberg likes sex. and the connection between sex and violence. The sex on the staircase fit… somehow. It shouldn’t have. but it did. Then her response is another surprise. Remember: sex scenes (usually) don’t contain conflict. Cronenberg regularly gives his sex scenes conflict.
Is that a huge bruise on her back?
Cronenberg (or the story writers) keep it turned up. The suspense and action stairstep: bad guys in bar, other bad guys, sex on stairs, phone call from Ritchie and trip to Philly, etc.
Does his night trip = journey into darkness. A storyteller with Dave’s skill and experience would use day and night for meaning.
“Nice gate” sounds like foreshadowing. If it proves to not be, well, it would be a little disappointing. It would seem a little cheap. The line doesn’t come across like Tarantino small talk.
Whoa! William Hurt! How do thugs know what to do? Is there training?: follow the guest, spread out, etc.
I always grimice and deflat when a “good killer” does things a good killer wouldn’t do. Combat = Conceal and Cover. When the killer stands with his back to an open door just to stare down at the recently departed… sigh. I have to work to get back into the story. I have to consciously try to get back to suspended belief.
Lots of POV shots. No handheld shots; I like that. It means the story has to create the tension.
Ooo. His face is sunken and sallow.
She loves her daddy. They could have done more with that. They could have constricted our tear glands, but I realize David wanted the scene silent.
What is on his contenance? it looks like “I am Joey”
what is on her’s? It looks like “did you take care of it?”
The son, now, changes back to how he started: nice, timid. That isn’t good for the story. Oh well.
What! David! He ends there?! Brilliant and perfect, but I wanted more.